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HogtiedCowboy · Post by **HogtiedCowboy** » Thu Jun 07, 2007 7:48 pm

Hey,

This is my first tease, let me know what you think. I hope to do a sequel later if the feedback isnt too brutal

elgoomgnizalb · Post by **elgoomgnizalb** » Thu Jun 07, 2007 8:32 pm

It seems to end fairly abruptly; is it supposed to?

curved · Post by **curved** » Thu Jun 07, 2007 10:41 pm

I agree a very sudden end, and it was going really well up to that point.

Definitely do a sequel - you can't leave it like that...

alexi4u · Post by **alexi4u** » Fri Jun 08, 2007 12:56 am

It appears you meant to have a next page and ended the tease by mistake. Up to that point I would have rated it a five as the concept was very good, but got a 4 from me. Also, how could I masturbate if step-daughter has not at least temporarily unlocked me. You need a slide inserted to cover that faux pas. Also, stay away from fake breast. It took me forever to edge on the third mistress.

HogtiedCowboy · Post by **HogtiedCowboy** » Fri Jun 08, 2007 1:13 am

sorry about that, the last page wasnt included. I think i fixed it

Post by **dark** » Fri Jun 08, 2007 1:52 am

No problem we all make mistakes. Fortunatly nobody is perfect. Thank you for your contribution

And I closed the other thread and will delete it tomorrow. I think one thread for one tease is enough

HogtiedCowboy · Post by **HogtiedCowboy** » Fri Jun 08, 2007 2:21 am

the next one is up too now

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