My first tease

liljake · Post by **liljake** » Fri Apr 27, 2007 6:38 am

Boyfriend trouble is my first attempt at a tease. Hope it's ok....

wonkywanker · Post by **wonkywanker** » Fri Apr 27, 2007 1:57 pm

you hope it's ok? I think every tease is ok because the author can bring their own personal touch to the community.

I think it was very good for a first tease, good in the sense that it appealed to me.

only criticism is, it was a bit short but otherwise a sound tease, well done.

lagavulin_nl · Post by **lagavulin_nl** » Fri Apr 27, 2007 2:26 pm

I liked it too. Like Wonky said a bit short. She could definitely turn out to be very mean and humiliating in the next part.

liljake · Post by **liljake** » Sat Apr 28, 2007 1:45 am

This tease isn't quite so long for a couple of reasons. First, since this is my initial attempt at making a tease, I didn't want to go overboard. Second, unfortunately, it was geting late and my creativity was hitting a wall as I became more and more tired. I know I could have come back another day and worked on it, but being my first one, I wanted to post it.
Don't worry-she'll be back and even angrier for what her "boyfriend" does to her...

chris100 · Post by **chris100** » Sat Apr 28, 2007 9:21 pm

love it m8.... fantastic first effort.....

can wait for more !! :)

liljake · Post by **liljake** » Sat Apr 28, 2007 9:28 pm

Here you go...

She's in a nastier mood.

Thoughts? Comments?

My first tease

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