A CHANCE ENCOUNTER

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mellowfellow
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A CHANCE ENCOUNTER

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This was my first webtease. Any feedback would be great. I'll keep them coming if Princess Rachel has fans. Any Suggestions from anyone who did the tease and followed it to the letter?
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Princess Rachel is cute and I love schoolgirl uniforms, but you really need to reduce the amount of your text. You can even repeat some of the pictures, if it allows you to reduce the text, and still maintain the story.
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Re: A CHANCE ENCOUNTER

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I liked it.

I personally would've added more of a public humiliation. And I would like to see something where Princess Rachel is teasing a girl in the future.

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thanks guys. Ya i definately know i need to reduce the text, shoulda just gone ahead and repeated a few pics your right. And thats not a bad idea, rachel teasing a girl. I'll def take this into account for the next one. Thanks guys
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