Descent Into Darkness: Feedback

[Sapphire]

Hi y'all! Feedback on my newest tease, Descent Into Darkness, is appreciated! ( https://milovana.com/webteases/showtease.php?id=34668 )

This is my fourth tease. This one is quite different from the other teases I've made so far. I made a tease that was very lighthearted, made as a joke: https://milovana.com/webteases/showtease.php?id=35348 . This one is very different from that. This one tells you the harsh truth as it is. The title, Descent into Darkness, I believe is fitting.

At first it got very negative reviews, and I wonder if it's because it was so dark and people weren't used to that on this site. It's slowly started to rise up; crossing my fingers that it gets above 4.0 :)

Please, all feedback is welcome! I want to continue to improve on my webtease writing skills.

I also wrote two teases on cum-eating; you can check them out here...
https://milovana.com/webteases/showtease.php?id=35155
https://milovana.com/webteases/showtease.php?id=42674

[someone43]

Interesting premise, but way too many timers for my enjoyment.

[Sapphire]

Interesting premise, but way too many timers for my enjoyment.

Thanks for the feedback! I debated that while making it; I too do not like a lot of timers, as sometimes I like to skip through to the good stuff. Problem was, the point of the tease is a psychological torture, and you don't get that if you skip to the end. I wanted to give the participant an experience in their own head; being able to skip through it would be like skipping through foreplay, and every girl can tell you foreplay isn't something you skip. I decided a forced slow build-up was more important. Sorry it didn't float your boat!