Red and Green v2 Feedback.

[Haggard316]

id like to thank quert, cumhardy and dtspam, it took me along time to find the the bikini pictures, i mean you cant just find that kind of shit on porn sites, i looked around for at least 4-6 days and finally said screw it solids no jerking and patterned jerking. it's really a pain in the ass pleasing these guys on here especially the ones that just fap and fap, really a typo turns people off now a days...come on seriously?

[Haggard316]

I hardly write feedback as I usually lurk around.

But this time I have to open my mouth on this.

When I saw your flashtease description saying "This will be a TOTM Nominee for sure" i got immediately turned off. Spells arrogance.

Next, I had to X the window after the 2nd page just cause I feel so rushed into the entire thing. No introduction no greeting no "feel" to it. (at least for the first two pages, since those were the only two pages I actually bothered to read)

The typographical error on your first statement on the first page is also a turn off.

Sorry that I sound harsh, but like I said, I hardly write feedback and this time where I write, it is a negative one. I hope you appreciate my straightforwardness though.

EDIT: I decided to give the flashtease a few more pages of chance and again I got turned off by a very distracting typographical error on the page with the first instance of a naked girl, saying "Right now I want you to get COMEpletely naked and ........"

The lack of a comma after "right now" already makes it feel rushed. I can still bear with that. But the typographical error after that was the last straw.

http://www.milovana.com/webteases/#author=sunset

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[cumhardy]

Tell me what you think...

Why create a feedback thread if you can't accept critisism? You can't ask people to tell you what they think then yell at them for telling you what they think...


EDIT:
Also, where are you searching for pics? Heres some good red and green bikini pics, at the beach. Not too hard to find at asktiava.


GREEN
http://www.bikinidream.net/gals/bd_0014 ... ?id=100028
http://www.bikinidream.net/gals/bd_0016 ... ?id=100028
http://gallery.bikini-dare.com/roos/03/index.html
http://www.bikinidream.net/gals/glamm00 ... ?id=100028
http://www.lilykoh.com/rss/hiphopbikini ... zExOjI6Mg/
http://www.bikinidream.net/gals/bd_0019 ... ?id=100028
http://aziani.com/gals/christinevinson/ ... IwODozOjY4

RED
http://www.sunnyleone.com/gal/new/pictu ... zYuMC4wLjA
http://www.bikinidream.net/gals/bd_0016 ... ?id=100028
http://www.bikinidream.net/gals/glammx1 ... ?id=100028
http://www.bikinidream.net/gals/glammx1 ... ?id=100028
http://www.bikinidream.net/gals/glamm00 ... ?id=100028
http://www.bikinidream.net/gals/glam006 ... ?id=100028
http://gallery.bikini-dare.com/samantha/03/index.html

[pjh776]

Wow, sometimes I can't believe my eyes. I'm loosing faith in humanity. The stupidity and arrogance levels can go far beyond what I used to believe was the maximum.

[Dream_On]

Haggard you were given constructive criticism. Someone does not need to have written a bunch of teases to give constructive feedback. Honestly you should be glad people are listing things they don't like about the tease, because it only helps you get better at writing them in the long run. If all you got for feedback was people kissing your ass, saying how great the tease was it wouldn't help you get any better at writing them.

[Sunset]

http://www.milovana.com/webteases/#author=sunset

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Then don't ask for feedback.

Oh and you didn't list down the requirements of someone who is allowed to give feedback to you (e.g. must have constructed/created a webtease/flashtease before).

Giving you feedback utilizes my time and doesn't benefit me at all. It's for your own sake cause you asked for feedback.

I can always not talk to you. But do I choose to? (again: hey, you asked for feedback!)

EDIT: And you're flaming me. Is that allowed in the forums?

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