FB: Worth It?
FB: Worth It?
I just published part one of a new series titled "Worth It?". Part one is at:
http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showt ... p?id=11574
This tease is completely original, but is a kind of response (not really a sequel) to
"A Teasing Tale" (by "The Queen of Mean"). However, you need not read that tease first, unless you want to understand more about the character Kayden and feel the hero's (i.e., "your") obsession more keenly.
Feedback and comments are welcome. Enjoy!
http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showt ... p?id=11574
This tease is completely original, but is a kind of response (not really a sequel) to
"A Teasing Tale" (by "The Queen of Mean"). However, you need not read that tease first, unless you want to understand more about the character Kayden and feel the hero's (i.e., "your") obsession more keenly.
Feedback and comments are welcome. Enjoy!
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It wasn't bad for a beginning, but I didn't like that you basically rehashed the entire first tease.
Having read that one, I found the "remembering" part just dragged and was unnecessary.
However, I "got" what you were going for there, so maybe it was just a personal thing.
As a side note, not really about the writing, but I'd have taken Ashlynn any day.
I really like Kayden too, but in this scenario...I'd never pass up a sure thing with Ashlynn for an extremely long shot with Kayden.
Having read that one, I found the "remembering" part just dragged and was unnecessary.
However, I "got" what you were going for there, so maybe it was just a personal thing.
As a side note, not really about the writing, but I'd have taken Ashlynn any day.
I really like Kayden too, but in this scenario...I'd never pass up a sure thing with Ashlynn for an extremely long shot with Kayden.
Re: FB: Worth It?
Thanks for the constructive criticism. I appreciate it. I wanted to emphasize the importance of that account in Ashlynn's training, but I can see how the recapitulation might be a drag.Incubo wrote:It wasn't bad for a beginning, but I didn't like that you basically rehashed the entire first tease.
Having read that one, I found the "remembering" part just dragged and was unnecessary.
However, I "got" what you were going for there, so maybe it was just a personal thing.
As a side note, not really about the writing, but I'd have taken Ashlynn any day.
I really like Kayden too, but in this scenario...I'd never pass up a sure thing with Ashlynn for an extremely long shot with Kayden.
I agree that the rational thing for the hero to do is to take Ashlynn. But he's been working on his training for so long, he just can't seem to think rationally about it.
Re: FB: Worth It? (Part 2)
Part 2 of my Worth It? series is now available at:
http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showt ... p?id=11657
Enjoy, and comments are welcome.
http://www.milovana.com/webteases/showt ... p?id=11657
Enjoy, and comments are welcome.
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Re: FB: Worth It?
Really enjoyed part 2. :)
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Considering this tease series is based off one of my favourite stories. Can't wait to read Part 2.
Re: FB: Worth It?
Thanks to you and pbchillin for the kind words. Lockgrid, I assume you mean to say you are looking forward to part 3?lockgrid wrote:Considering this tease series is based off one of my favourite stories. Can't wait to read Part 2.
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I actually wrote that before I read Part 2. But I have to say I enjoyed it very much and can't wait for Part 3.cactusman wrote:Thanks to you and pbchillin for the kind words. Lockgrid, I assume you mean to say you are looking forward to part 3?lockgrid wrote:Considering this tease series is based off one of my favourite stories. Can't wait to read Part 2.
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I have now read worth it part 1 and 2 and I have to say that, while I was not a big fan of the Maria pavlova series, that it seems like the cactusman I love to read is back. Please keep on with this series I think it is one of your best by far!
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Thanks very much, I appreciate it.Quazwierdcev283 wrote:I have now read worth it part 1 and 2 and I have to say that, while I was not a big fan of the Maria pavlova series, that it seems like the cactusman I love to read is back. Please keep on with this series I think it is one of your best by far!
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I found the original story pretty intriguing. Both parts 1 and 2 of this tease series have been excellent so far!
I'm just curious to know how long you plan to extend it... will it be a three part tease? Will it be a twelve part tease? Is it a "lets see how it goes" tease?
I'm curious to see where you go with this series next!
I'm just curious to know how long you plan to extend it... will it be a three part tease? Will it be a twelve part tease? Is it a "lets see how it goes" tease?
I'm curious to see where you go with this series next!
Re: FB: Worth It?
Thanks very much for the kind words. I'm glad you want to see what happens next.baultista wrote:I found the original story pretty intriguing. Both parts 1 and 2 of this tease series have been excellent so far!
I'm just curious to know how long you plan to extend it... will it be a three part tease? Will it be a twelve part tease? Is it a "lets see how it goes" tease?
I'm curious to see where you go with this series next!
I plan to end it with part 3. The plan is that "you" finally give in to Kayden and go back to her place...
Well, you must figure that has to happen... But I'd better not give anything else away before it's written!
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Re: FB: Worth It?
As usual, you keep me on the edge! LoL! Awesome work Cactusman!
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Thanks very much wonderbo. I appreciate the kind words.wonderbo wrote:As usual, you keep me on the edge! LoL! Awesome work Cactusman!
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Wow, Really enjoyed your tease. Keep it up !
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